Hello guys, I dont know if there is any topic about Haiku, but i think it would be funny to share experiences about. I wrote these ones, would be glad if you share your opinion about and share your owns 🙂
Thanks for sharing! I’ll add that 止^({や})む is the word for an 嵐 to stop, not 済む. The duplication of 花 in the first senryū can be made better by replacing the first one with 華^({はな}).
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Thanks for sharing! I’ll add that 止^({や})む is the word for an 嵐 to stop, not 済む. The duplication of 花 in the first senryū can be made better by replacing the first one with 華^({はな}).
Here’s mine.
九連勤
されど給料
あがらない
Are you going for 俳句 or for 川柳?
My favorite 川柳 (not my own) is
手伝いの
つもりいつのま
担当者